Posted by randy (18.104.22.168) on December 11, 2004 at 03:55:08:
In Reply to: You guys are dispicable! posted by Beverly on December 10, 2004 at 20:14:24:
Nice first try!
Try adding more dimension to your fantasy characters. Give Beverly a job title and develop the scene where she discovers her husband. Maybe get her to sneek peeks at him over a long period and decide whether to talk to her friends about it.
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